WALT-write a narrative story based on our artwork.
One day in a small village there were two boys.Their names were Mark and Jack. Jack said to Mark, ”Put your togs on now we’re going for a swim at the beach”. When they went outside they both said ”it is so hot out here”. After that they walked up the hill. When Mark got up the top of the hill, he jumped off and shouted ”WOW!”. When Mark got out of the water, he yelled to Jack.”That was fun”. When it was Jacks turn he jumped off and he shouted ”WOW!”.Mark was waiting for Jack. When Mark went in the ocean he looked and looked for Jack, but he still couldn’t find him anywhere.
When Mark got out of the water, he looked for his phone and dialed 111. Jack was still at the bottom of the ocean. When the ambulance came , two people from the ambulance swam all the way to the bottom of the ocean as fast as a speeding car. They found Jack struggling to stay alive. They untangled him and dragged him back to the shore.
They took him to the ambulance as fast as they could When he woke up he was happy to be alive. The doctor gave him a drink of water. The doctors told Jack to stay with Mark at home until he feels better and to not forget to take your medicine.When he felt better they decided to go to the pools instead of the beach.
They played happily and safely for ever.
This story is about two boys who went for a swim.
2 comments:
Hi Ma'asi, I like your Narrative story about to boys going for a swim but I think you should add a little bit more descriptive detail in your story, Keep it up.
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